The inestimable Graylin Fox and Sara Brookes have inexplicably allowed me to contribute to Six Sentence Sunday, wherein authors (a group which I aspire to include myself in) offer six sentences from their current works in progress.
Below are six sentences from "No Good Deed", a short story I am revising in a perhaps futile attempt to get something fictive published. Judge with appropriate harshness. (And, yes, I am aware today is Friday, not Sunday, but the posts are aggregated for Sunday publication. One must have the work up for linkage in advance.)
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“But if your friend isn’t burning, I wonder where the smoke is coming from.”
“Good question,” I replied. “His clothing, perhaps?”
“Engulfed in a pyre of mystical flame, and naked in public. Not your friend’s day, is it?”
“Actually, it’s his birthday.”
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Comments are welcome. I may yet post the entire work (temporarily) for feedback before I sub it out again.
Being your own birthday candle? Priceless!
ReplyDeleteSmokin! Heh. Welcome to Six Sunday!
ReplyDeleteWhat a way to spend a birthday! At least it's a mystical flame.
ReplyDeleteI loved it!! OMG, I want to read more!
ReplyDeleteI definitely want to read more! Welcome to Six Sunday.
ReplyDeleteFor heaven's sake, somebody blow that poor man...out.
ReplyDeleteBurning, naked, and turning a year older....sounds like fun! Thanks for contributing!
ReplyDeleteI just kept thinking, so the guy is smoking hot and naked. Yes, my mind is in the gutter. Always.
ReplyDeleteIt's my first time too, and it didn't hurt a bit.
Thanks for sharing.
Christa
Oh, I love the tone of this. Makes me want to see more and know just what is going on.
ReplyDeleteWhat? That's it? I liked the tone of the piece.
ReplyDeleteI love that! Too funny.
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